(A sonnet in syllables)
Red lips, kohled eyes, bounce in her steps
A glance that zipped and zoomed with zest
For everyone she was the best
Moreover when she wore her specs
She seemed like one who loved the depths!
She figured figures in a test
Her math to her was like a fest
And all equations seemed like sex!
And funnily she fell in love
With someone who loved rhymes with words
Of fallen petals he’d brood and write
Of brutal lives, the way brutes shove!
She then began her love for words
And he with numbers. All was right!
Arvind Passey
12 July 2012
14 comments
Akanksha Dureja says:
Jul 12, 2012
This is just wow:) Awesome would be an understatement!
Loved each word, each rhyme!
Arvind Passey says:
Jul 13, 2012
Thanks a lot, Akanksha. Well, prepare yourself for more sonnets… because I really loved writing this one. 🙂
Priyanka Dey says:
Jul 12, 2012
aHHHaaaa!!!
😀
Love It!
Arvind Passey says:
Jul 13, 2012
Now that’s a rather poetic ‘aHHHaaaa!!!’ — two syllables there. 🙂 Wish emoticons too could be given a syllabic position in the lexicon. Would be interesting to see the result… and the euphoria of the new generation. 🙂
KayEm says:
Jul 13, 2012
Awesome word pictures. Enjoyed your sonnet, AP.
Arvind Passey says:
Jul 13, 2012
Thanks a lot Kay Em… tried to stick to a defined syllabic count. Was attempting one after ages… but loved the experience.
The Fool says:
Jul 14, 2012
Well Mr. Passey, someone recently said they can’t write form poetry because poetry is not mathematics. That made me think. Maybe forms like the sonnet married words and math. So in a way your poem kind of represented that marriage that happens in a sonnet other than the marriage of a human mathematician and a poet. Needless to say, an excellent piece of art.
Arvind Passey says:
Jul 14, 2012
Yes, TF… poetry with even something as easy as a mere syllabic count needs a poet to juggle words and ideas many times to reach the right sound. It may make people say that this is contrived… but the real definition of contrived poetry is when a poet writes free verse and tries to break mere prose into what may LOOK LIKE a poem.
So yes, syllables are lovely to work with. 🙂
Lalima says:
Jul 14, 2012
& all the time I thought you are writing this for mrs sangeeta passey & you ..! Tell me if I’m wrong …!
Just loved it ….
Arvind Passey says:
Jul 14, 2012
🙂
Does that explain?
alka narula says:
Jul 15, 2012
loved it…
Arvind Passey says:
Jul 16, 2012
Thank you, Alka… appreciation always leads to inspiration. 🙂
Diwakar Narayan says:
Jul 16, 2012
After some research on Sonnets that I have been doing for some days now, I came back to read your sonnet again. I re-read all the lines and counted the syllables. And uff! they are not arranged as required in a sonnet.
A Sonnet has to follow the Iambic Pentameter..in a sequence like this: ba-BUM ba-BUM ba-BUM ba-BUM ba-BUM. What this means is that out of two syllables, one has to be unstressed and one stressed and you should have five such iambs. Considering one of the line from you poem:
And FUNnily she FELL in LOVE
Here, the Iambic Pentameter has gone for a toss!
Arvind Passey says:
Jul 16, 2012
Yes, the lines need ten syllables and this one is a modern version of a sonnet with eight syllables.
Obviously, the iambic pentameter scheme isn’t followed at all… and I have mentioned at the top that this is a sonnet in syllables.
But thank you for being such a vigilant reader… we need more like you in this world.
I can vouch that though your email id has ‘infected mind’ attached to it, you are a a nice person who cares for what is correct. 🙂